things fixed in the edit

I am doing an edit pass on a story appearing later this year. Here are, essentially, patch notes.

  • the protagonist will no longer accidentally transform into a water feature
  • tenses have been normalized
  • anachronistic city lighting decisions have been revised
  • the lake has been removed
  • there is now a transition to mark the appearance of the unhallowed dead
  • the camel is no longer abandoned forlornly

This is why editors are very important and wonderful people.